hellooo!! I finally had the time to play Act 2 so I wanted to leave my comments about it! ^^
I don’t think I’ve said this before but the backgrounds being just outlines with just a few color shades, really fits the style of the sprites and the whole aesthic of the game. I’m not saying a full detailed, full-color bg would’ve been a bad choice but… idk, I guess it reminds of manga panels so, it’s a plus for me :D
Val looks specially cute during this trip!! <3 I really love his outfit :D!! So cute!!! <333
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I like that we know why Donna acts likes that with Val, I mean, if I didn’t know anything, I would’ve said that she’s being unfair because she doesn’t even know him and she’s already judging him harshly.
But knowing what happened, it’s like… I totally understand why she feels the way she does with Val. Even though, that’s no excuse to treat Dashiell the way she does >:( It does feel like she looks at him as if he were her doll. Or more like, a MOM feeling like she can control her son however she wants (which is worse 🫠🫠). Acting like she knows what’s best for him even tho he’s an adult himself. like, I get where she’s coming from tho. totally valid. but still, he’s an adult. he can make decisions by himself. be them good or bad.
Oh boy, when Dashiell said he got a plan to matchmake Donna with Val it was like…..oh boy, you don’t know what you are doing. bless your innocence but oh boy, this is NOT gonna end well.
I know we met Saturday in Act1 but in think her character shines more in this Act. She’s the first one to say it out loud: “I don’t like Donna” bc she’s right! It’s Dashiell’s boss in the end, so to be bestfriends with her and how much he idolize her since he was a high-schooler, it’s like… it’s still your boss. And that she has so much control over him (in a job and emotionally as well) could be a huge DANGER if she just changes her mind :// Such a clever way to see how dangerous was that, was like “damn, Saturday, you are spot on!!!”
Also, she was like: “if she does something bad to Dashiell, we kill her” and Lupine was like “ok. count me in.” XDDDDD
The scene with Lupine and Dashiell with the piano :’((( I 100% understand where he comes from when he says “don’t think. that’s bad”. and when he cried, it was like…. :‘c Man, no, don’t cry :ccc
And then,
Donna pulled a gun on Val out of fucking nowhere, what the heck is going on?!!!! 😨😨
Val was so right to tell her that shooting him right there would’ve been SO traumatic for Dashiell, after what happened with his parents like, holy shit– i’m glad she didn’t do it in the end but WOAH
we finally see Val in vampire form!!! woah! 😁 so now, Dashiell knows the truth!!!! (well, not everything but the main point that he’s a vampire!!) 😌😌
also, just to be sure, are Dashiell and Lupine trans guys?????? bc if so <33333333 🥰🥰🥰
so these are all my comments!! ^^ This Act2 is really where we see how the plot thickens!!! 🤔🤔 there IS a contrast between Act1 and Act2! You were right on that, haha!!😁 It was a pleasure to read this Act2 too! What’s gonna happen now that Donna has decided to look for her “friends”? Hmmm. 🤔
I hope you know how much it means to me to have someone read and recount as much as you did from my project. Whenever my friends make games or write stories, I always try to give them detailed reviews like this, because it brings me so much joy when people write this kind of thing about something I’ve made.
I’m gonna be self-indulgent and give you some comments on your comments and a bunch of behind-the-scenes about the making of Act 2!
-I’m glad you like the backgrounds! They were originally supposed to be fully rendered. My friends saw the fully rendered backgrounds, and rushed to tell me how bad they looked. It was the first time they really told me something I was doing was bad, but I don’t like ignoring criticism. They were the ones who suggested the more minimal backgrounds with lines. I’m so glad I listened to them, they were SO right, and they saved me a TON of work rendering backgrounds. Sometimes, less is more!
-Val’s cute new outfit is based off of a bottle of perfume! It’s based off of Jean Paul Gaultier’s Le Male Terrible.
I saw this bottle, the name, and the razor blade necklace, and felt so inspired.
This outfit has existed since before Val was nice. He used to be kind of terrible! I’m satisfied with where he was then and where he is now, because I was able to write a nice guy who does messed up things as a result.
I looked at that bottle, and thought, “whatever man wears this is trying so desperately to be a bad-boy type! Let’s put this on this Scandinavian dork!”
-oh my god I’m SO glad you said what you did about saturday because AAAAAAAAH! I really have trouble writing side characters. I mean, I don’t have trouble writing them, I just feel weird letting side characters be side characters. I want every character to have a spotlight, in some way, so when I have a side character like her (I have such a soft spot for her too) I worry that I’m letting other characters take too much of a spotlight over them. I really wanted her personality to shine through.
-Lupine is a trans guy, and Dash considers himself transfemme (he/her), but is not explicitly a trans woman. When I was writing Dash the most, I was in a transition period where I was in the same kind of spot as him, but I’m transmasc (so, inverse almost!)
Now, I’m in a more explicitly masculine place, but I have a lot of friends who have settled into their gender feelings in a place that’s more like Dash’s. He’s a character that, whether people are transmasc or transfemme, they have told me they feel represented by.
I feel like a lot of trans characters out there are put into neat little boxes, when in real life, gender is messier than that, yknow? I wanted to convey that with some of my characters, especially with Dash. Even I feel represented by Dash, despite being on the other end of things. For example, I still use “she” pronouns despite being a man (he/her).
the important thing about any of my trans characters is that they are trans and that me and other trans people can look at them and go 🥰🥰🥰 omg i’m trans too
-The parts where Lupine or Dash say “don’t think, it’s bad for you…”
This is something known within my circles, but my husband says this to me. I stole it from him!
I was having trouble wrapping up a lot of scenes I wrote between my characters, because there were just so many thoughts and words that bubbled up inside them. But sometimes, you need to have silence, and I knew when they needed to have silence. I remembered what my husband tells me when I’m thinking too much. We’ll be in the car, I’ll be staring out the window, and he’ll say, “you’re thinking. Stop that.” And he’s RIGHT!
-Donna wouldn’t have killed Val lol. I know that, but I don’t think Val did. She’s too scared to kill anyone anymore, I think. Both her and Val could never kill anyone like that nowadays.
She was a character that took a lot of work to write. I didn’t want to let people down with her. I didn’t want it to seem like Val was the good guy the whole time. I wanted to show how traumatized she was and how much she tried to look tough in front of him. So I gave her a glock.
Anyway, it’s been a pleasure to read and reply to this. Thank you so much for reading!
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hellooo!! I finally had the time to play Act 2 so I wanted to leave my comments about it! ^^
I don’t think I’ve said this before but the backgrounds being just outlines with just a few color shades, really fits the style of the sprites and the whole aesthic of the game. I’m not saying a full detailed, full-color bg would’ve been a bad choice but… idk, I guess it reminds of manga panels so, it’s a plus for me :D
Val looks specially cute during this trip!! <3 I really love his outfit :D!! So cute!!! <333
SPOILERS AHEAD
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
But knowing what happened, it’s like… I totally understand why she feels the way she does with Val. Even though, that’s no excuse to treat Dashiell the way she does >:( It does feel like she looks at him as if he were her doll. Or more like, a MOM feeling like she can control her son however she wants (which is worse 🫠🫠). Acting like she knows what’s best for him even tho he’s an adult himself. like, I get where she’s coming from tho. totally valid. but still, he’s an adult. he can make decisions by himself. be them good or bad.
Oh boy, when Dashiell said he got a plan to matchmake Donna with Val it was like…..oh boy, you don’t know what you are doing. bless your innocence but oh boy, this is NOT gonna end well.
I know we met Saturday in Act1 but in think her character shines more in this Act. She’s the first one to say it out loud: “I don’t like Donna” bc she’s right! It’s Dashiell’s boss in the end, so to be bestfriends with her and how much he idolize her since he was a high-schooler, it’s like… it’s still your boss. And that she has so much control over him (in a job and emotionally as well) could be a huge DANGER if she just changes her mind :// Such a clever way to see how dangerous was that, was like “damn, Saturday, you are spot on!!!”
Also, she was like: “if she does something bad to Dashiell, we kill her” and Lupine was like “ok. count me in.” XDDDDD
The scene with Lupine and Dashiell with the piano :’((( I 100% understand where he comes from when he says “don’t think. that’s bad”. and when he cried, it was like…. :‘c Man, no, don’t cry :ccc
And then,
Donna pulled a gun on Val out of fucking nowhere, what the heck is going on?!!!! 😨😨
Val was so right to tell her that shooting him right there would’ve been SO traumatic for Dashiell, after what happened with his parents like, holy shit– i’m glad she didn’t do it in the end but WOAH
we finally see Val in vampire form!!! woah! 😁 so now, Dashiell knows the truth!!!! (well, not everything but the main point that he’s a vampire!!) 😌😌
also, just to be sure, are Dashiell and Lupine trans guys?????? bc if so <33333333 🥰🥰🥰
so these are all my comments!! ^^ This Act2 is really where we see how the plot thickens!!! 🤔🤔 there IS a contrast between Act1 and Act2! You were right on that, haha!!😁 It was a pleasure to read this Act2 too! What’s gonna happen now that Donna has decided to look for her “friends”? Hmmm. 🤔
thank you-
I hope you know how much it means to me to have someone read and recount as much as you did from my project. Whenever my friends make games or write stories, I always try to give them detailed reviews like this, because it brings me so much joy when people write this kind of thing about something I’ve made. I’m gonna be self-indulgent and give you some comments on your comments and a bunch of behind-the-scenes about the making of Act 2!
-I’m glad you like the backgrounds! They were originally supposed to be fully rendered. My friends saw the fully rendered backgrounds, and rushed to tell me how bad they looked. It was the first time they really told me something I was doing was bad, but I don’t like ignoring criticism. They were the ones who suggested the more minimal backgrounds with lines. I’m so glad I listened to them, they were SO right, and they saved me a TON of work rendering backgrounds. Sometimes, less is more!
-Val’s cute new outfit is based off of a bottle of perfume! It’s based off of Jean Paul Gaultier’s Le Male Terrible.
I saw this bottle, the name, and the razor blade necklace, and felt so inspired. This outfit has existed since before Val was nice. He used to be kind of terrible! I’m satisfied with where he was then and where he is now, because I was able to write a nice guy who does messed up things as a result. I looked at that bottle, and thought, “whatever man wears this is trying so desperately to be a bad-boy type! Let’s put this on this Scandinavian dork!”
-oh my god I’m SO glad you said what you did about saturday because AAAAAAAAH! I really have trouble writing side characters. I mean, I don’t have trouble writing them, I just feel weird letting side characters be side characters. I want every character to have a spotlight, in some way, so when I have a side character like her (I have such a soft spot for her too) I worry that I’m letting other characters take too much of a spotlight over them. I really wanted her personality to shine through.
-Lupine is a trans guy, and Dash considers himself transfemme (he/her), but is not explicitly a trans woman. When I was writing Dash the most, I was in a transition period where I was in the same kind of spot as him, but I’m transmasc (so, inverse almost!) Now, I’m in a more explicitly masculine place, but I have a lot of friends who have settled into their gender feelings in a place that’s more like Dash’s. He’s a character that, whether people are transmasc or transfemme, they have told me they feel represented by. I feel like a lot of trans characters out there are put into neat little boxes, when in real life, gender is messier than that, yknow? I wanted to convey that with some of my characters, especially with Dash. Even I feel represented by Dash, despite being on the other end of things. For example, I still use “she” pronouns despite being a man (he/her). the important thing about any of my trans characters is that they are trans and that me and other trans people can look at them and go 🥰🥰🥰 omg i’m trans too
-The parts where Lupine or Dash say “don’t think, it’s bad for you…” This is something known within my circles, but my husband says this to me. I stole it from him! I was having trouble wrapping up a lot of scenes I wrote between my characters, because there were just so many thoughts and words that bubbled up inside them. But sometimes, you need to have silence, and I knew when they needed to have silence. I remembered what my husband tells me when I’m thinking too much. We’ll be in the car, I’ll be staring out the window, and he’ll say, “you’re thinking. Stop that.” And he’s RIGHT!
-Donna wouldn’t have killed Val lol. I know that, but I don’t think Val did. She’s too scared to kill anyone anymore, I think. Both her and Val could never kill anyone like that nowadays. She was a character that took a lot of work to write. I didn’t want to let people down with her. I didn’t want it to seem like Val was the good guy the whole time. I wanted to show how traumatized she was and how much she tried to look tough in front of him. So I gave her a glock.
Anyway, it’s been a pleasure to read and reply to this. Thank you so much for reading!